Sunday 30 March 2014

End your story #Writing

Assalammualaikum..

Entry kali ney aku just nak share ngan korang my writing. Writing ney aku kena hantar ngan cikgu aku esok. So any, correction will be made okayy? Kalau sudi, give me your opinion supaya kita boleh exchange pendapat. Anyway, thanks for reading.
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Instruction: end your story with knowing that you were just dreaming.

It was bright shiny day, just perfect to play tennis and there I was in front of a very big, old tree trunk. I was about to pick up the tennis ball when I turned and look down to see the hole below the tree trunk. I was very curious. As the curiosity killed the cat, so I checked. It was infinity view and very dark too. I just do not know how can I suddenly slipped into it and slides down the hole and reached the ground. I screamed at the top of my lungs but it was useless as I was alone down in the ground.
                All I can see was only a weird chamber with a pink door in the middle of it. As I opened it, my eyes getting smaller because of the shining light. I can’t see very clearly but I just moved on. I can smell the sweet dew of the surrounding and I really loved the smell. ‘Where am I?’ was the only question in my head.
                When I can see clearly again, I saw a tree with a bunch of small, round and golden-wrapped chocolates that similar to ‘Ferrero Rocher’. The stick of the tree was made up of chocolate sticks. The colourful flowers were all made up of variety colours of chocolate. The river was also made up of melted chocolate that flow along it. I really loved this place! I just ate everything that I picked and they were all made up of chocolates and for sure it was all very delicious! Even though it was made up of chocolate but the taste was not very sweet. Too sweet was just not my cup of tea but these were instead. I just loved it.
                As I walked along the garden that full of beautiful butterflies everywhere, I saw a little cute strawberry-shaped house in front of me. So, I walked to the house and knocked the door but there was no answer. I knocked again and the door was opened by itself. I just entered the house. Suddenly an old lady greeted me like she knew me very well before. She invited me to sit down on her pink and soft sofa. As I sat, it was very comfortable and I had torn the sofa inadvertently. I was so afraid if she got angry to me so I just swallowed it and ‘Oh please do not tell me this sofa was made up of marshmallow!’ I whispered to myself. But indeed it was ‘yes’. Why everything were made up of sweet food? It was weird but I like it though. I really wanted to ask the old lady when she suddenly brought me to her yard so I thought that maybe I should ask later.
                At her yard, we have a tea together. She told me much about her family and there were I knew who made this land and the most importantly why she was the only person in this very sore to speak ‘magic chocolate land’. She built it because her daughter loved chocolate very much. But now she had gone because of obesity and she wanted to live in her own world because she still believed that her daughter will come to meet her and together eat the chocolate again. Then, I thought to myself, ‘I know the reason of her death. She died because of eating too much sweetened food that cause her to become obesity and died’ I laugh to myself but I hide it so that the old lady would not notice it. How cruel I am. But yes, I do agreed that the old lady is a very loving mother as she is willing to wait for her dead daughter to come back.
                After done with our tea, she brought me to her daughter’s bedroom and let me slept there to have a rest. I grinned to myself. As she left me all alone in the bedroom, I really enjoyed myself as the room was full of variety chocolates. Some are big chocolate bars, long chocolate sticks, big and small chocolate balls. I ate as much as I can until I lied on the marshmallow bed helplessly with both of my hands were holding chocolates. Yeah, I love this, I love this, I love this and suddenly BONKK!
                I opened my eyes as I felt pain on my back and I realised that I was laying on my floor as I fell down the bed. Okay fine, that was hurt. I watched my hands to get my chocolates but there were none. Immediately I stood up. I rubbed my eyes not once, not twice but several times. I even slapped my cheeks until it turned red. Where were all the chocolates? Why am I in my room now? Am I was dreaming just now? ARGHHHH! Then I realised that all of those things were just exists in my dream. Never mind, later I make my own chocolate land. I grinned.


-The End-

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